Sunday, March 6, 2011

Cultural Diversity

    In this whole world, there is this call diversity which states that all people are different from other. Diversity is a good thing. Next, cultural diversity is important to the Earth and if we didn't have diversity, then all of the people in the world look just like each other, no one is unique and it's boring. Therefore in religions, we have Christians and Islams are two different religions, that makes them diverse from other religions.
    All the people in the world should venerate diversity because if no one venerate it, the world is not creative and no one is unique. Second thing, it is also important to venerate diversity so that the world can get better is because once you respect diversity, people will respect you and it is easier to communicate with each other. Also once you get the idea of how important is diversity, you will be able to understand and get along with different people. Everyone venerate the difference of other, so why don't you? Make the world better by respecting and accept varieties of cultures.

2 comments:

  1. World choice: 1
    Sentence Fluency: 3
    Organization: 2
    Proofreading: 2
    Overall: 8
    Average: 2

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  2. I could improve by making my sentence clearer and choose the right word choice so that the readers will not stop and ask themselves what does it mean. I also need to make more striking sentences influence. And what i have done well is that i have states and connected the right main idea of the two paragraphs.

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